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Post by Nickpick on Jul 15, 2010 23:28:56 GMT -6
Outstanding! - Huffington Post Beautifully Written - Me (Nickpick) Best Story Since I've Seen Since Twilight...And I've Never Seen Twilight!" - Some Magazine Epic - TVguide If There Was Another Series That Was Better Than This Then I Wouldn't Waste My Time Posting This Comment But There's No Better Series Out There So I'm Writing This - Some Guy.. Lol seriously thought! your an amazing writer and you've blown my stories out of the water. I'm jealous of your talent and skills...keep it up!...seriously keep it up or i'll hunt you down lol
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Post by cradleman on Jul 17, 2010 20:52:38 GMT -6
just finished Episode Five of season 3 and HOLY SHIT!!!!! That was AWESOME! It's very creepy, and I love how you are knocking the different people off. also love the characterizations, they are PERFECT for the high school setting. brilliant stuff(one minor note, Jack LAY on the floor, not lied on the floor. just saying, ) but still, incredible stuff, can't wait to see how this season turns out.
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Post by jukenami on Jul 20, 2010 14:54:53 GMT -6
Episode 5 of season 3 was great, it had a lot of emotion It takes a good writer to get your hopes up, start to really like a character, think something good is going to happen, and then your hopes are let down all of a sudden, you are kind of sad, and you want to punch the writer for doing that. Thats a good writer
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Post by spideyfan914 on Jul 20, 2010 15:11:12 GMT -6
Um.... Thanks....?
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Post by cradleman on Jul 20, 2010 19:00:58 GMT -6
ok, so i read episode six and you are getting another HOLY SHIT!!!!!! seriously, this is one of the coolest horror stories i've ever read. (granted, coming from someone who hates horror, but still). The creative ways you are killing off the characters, just how well you have the high school drama nailed, it's just pretty much perfect. cannot WAIT for the other episodes of this season.
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Post by spideyfan914 on Jul 22, 2010 11:34:02 GMT -6
From the creator of Heroes and Villains....
The halls were dark and narrow. Miles beneath the earth, it was dead-silent aside from the occasional pulse of lava, bubbling right outside. It was so empty. There were no signs of life. And then, there a small clatter. At the end of one corridor, a small vent had fallen from the ceiling. Perhaps it hadn't been bolted in well. Or perhaps, there was an intruder. A man in a hulking metal suit jumped down from the vent. His name was Guy Mansen, though he was better known as Mindworm, elite member of the Overseers and team strategist. His mind was like a human calculator, able to solve even the most complex problems at lightning-fast speeds. These skills made him a brilliant tactician, hacker, and engineer. Some even say he has minute psychic potential, but such was never proven. Now, he walked through the halls with great caution, for he knew not what he would find around the corner. A beeping emanated off the walls. A bomb? No - the noise was coming form Mindworm himself! A call, a call from home. Reluctantly, he pressed a button on his side and whispered into the small built-in communications. "Hello?" "Guy, this is Holly." "Yeah, uh, listen Holly - now's really not a good time…." "It's never a good time with you! You're always charging into some Mayan temple, or saving from obscure Asian country from some obscure cult group!" "It was a ruthless clan of sacrificial jungle god-worshippers! And Hong Kong is the capital of China, Dear - China's not obscure." "Guy, do you know what today is?" "Uh-oh…." "Today is your son's birthday." "I'm sorry, Holly," he pleaded, sneaking through the halls. "I guess it just…. slipped my mind…." Suddenly, two metal doors closed around either side of him, and lasers shot out of the walls, zipping around the area. Mindworm let his suit take over, as it scanned the room to find the exact location of the lasers, and moved Mindworm's body agilely around them. Mindworm took aim at one of the lasers and shot a small rocket out of his fist. He repeated this process for each one, until they were all destroyed. "What was that??" his wife hollered over the phone. "Lasers. I'm a bit trapped at the moment…." Mindworm looked to the floor - one of the tiles was slightly discolored. Stepping on it must've activated the trap. Holly sighed. "Guy, this isn't working out…. Day after day, it's just another mission with you! You're never home, Tommy doesn't even know who his father is -" "Tommy knows who I am, Holly. And don't forget to give him a kiss for me!" Mindworm felt around the walls for a weak spot. There! "When are you coming home? That's all I want to know." "As soon as I get some peace and quiet around here, I promise I'll come home. Sound good?" He took a step back and aimed his own laser at the wall, creating an opening just large enough for him to fit through. "No, Guy! That doesn't sound good!" "Well, what more do you want from me? I'm trying to keep world peace here!" "Look at you! You're always so worried about saving the world that you've lost control of your own home!" "Hey, if you would just move to DC like I suggested -" "You know why we can't do that, Guy." "Yeah, yeah - because Tommy's got all his friends in school, and we can't do this to him, yadda yadda. You do, of course, realize that kids move all the time?" "And typically, they're scarred for life." The walls of the corridor opened up, revealing turrets which began to shoot rapid fire. Mindworm quickly flipped over them, dodging bullets at every turn. "He's fifteen years old - you want him to restart his life at the age of fifteen?" "He's a smart kid - he can look out for himself." A door was closing at the end of the passage. A small stick ejected from Mindworm's wrist, and he hurled it at the door, jimmying it open with seconds to spare, but it wouldn't hold for long! "Guy, this is a serious discussion. Can't you just see it my way for once?" Mindworm slid across the floor, past the bullets and under the door, just as the stick snapped and it slammed shut behind him. He was in a large, circular room. There was a ramp in front of him, leading up to an enormous tube in the center. "Listen, Dear, can we finish this later? I think I've stumbled onto something…." "It's always later with you, Guy…. What if there is no later?" Mindworm slowly ascended the ramp. "Listen, I'd really like to keep talking - you have no idea how much I'd love that - but I really, really have to go…." "Guy…. I was seeing someone." He froze. "It…. It's over now…. But if you can't be there for me…. I don't know how long…." Mindworm looked at the large tube in the center. There was something inside it, something hideous and brown. "I…. I have to go…." Holly sighed. "Fine…." Shaking off the news he'd been given, Mindworm ran up to the strange, suspended formation - it appeared to be…. a brain…. "HELLO, MINDWORM." The tube flashed as it spoke. "IT'S BEEN A LONG TIME, BUT AT LAST, WE MEET AGAIN." "I…. Do we…. know each other….?" "YOU DON'T REMEMBER? I'M INSULTED. AFTER ALL, ALL THAT I WANTED WAS A NEW BODY - FREE OF DISEASE. AND YOU STOLE IT FROM ME…." "The Brain!" he shouted out, images flashing through his head - but the Brain was dead! This couldn't be! "THAT'S RIGHT. I LIVE. LIKE SOMETHING OF A GHOST, REALLY. AFTER ALL, THOUGH I WAS ONCE ANTONY STANISLAVIA, GREATEST MIND OF THE MODERN ERA, YOU MEDDLED WHERE YOU DIDN'T BELONG - TURNED ME INTO THIS!" "You were trying to take over an innocent man's body! He'd have been killed! The damage to your body was a pure accident!" "BUT ALAS, I SURVIVED. YOU SEE, THE TRANSFER HAD ALREADY BEGUN, AND SO MY BRAIN WAVE PATTERNS STILL EXISTED IN CYBERSPACE. AFTER MANY YEARS, I'VE MANAGED TO REBUILD, SPENDING EVERY MOMENT CALCULATING MY REVENGE. AND AT LAST, I'VE LURED YOU HERE, TO MEET YOUR DOOM." Suddenly, the room lit up with a blinding light. Mindworm screamed in agony, as tentacles lashed out of the walls, grabbing onto him in his moment of weakness, stunning him with an electric pulse, and forcing him to his knees. "I WILL PLANT MY MIND INTO YOUR BODY. THAT SHOULD BE REASONABLE." A wire ejected from the tube, attaching three nodes to Mindworm's head. His mind was still whirling from the shock, everything was going blurry. And then, as the transfer begun, their minds suddenly became interlinked. Though only for a brief moment, Mindworm could see all of the Brain's thoughts, all of his plans, his entire life before the hero's eyes. And that brief moment granted Mindworm a small amount of the Brain's strength and rejuvenation - something unforeseen in the process. Slowly, Mindworm raised his hand, and took aim. He'd only have one shot at this - the transfer was draining his energy already! Finally, in the climax, he shot a rocket at the Brain! It exploded against the tube with such force, force that emanated through the entire room, knocking Mindworm back, disconnecting the nodes and chains, and damaging the very infrastructure of the base. The Brain himself was unharmed, the tube undamaged, but lava and magma were beginning to flow in the fortress. "NO!" Mindworm had seen the Brain's plans, and knew how he had planned to escape. Crouching down, Mindworm powered his suit for a large leap into the air, to a metal compartment above the Brain. Grabbing on as the lava filled the fortress, covering the floor, Mindworm opened a door and climbed inside - a shuttle, from which to escape. The lava was pouring in faster, sliding up and burying the Brain. Once it reached the shuttle, it would melt through, and the shuttle would be unusable. Mindworm pressed the buttons in sequence rapidly, remembering everything he had seen. All that was left was the password. The lava was rising to the top, only inches away now. The password was "LIFE." The shuttle began to shake, preparing for lift-off, as the lava made its way up to Mindworm. Finally, with only a split-second to spare, the shuttle launched upward into a long tunnel, erupting at the earth's surface. A parachute shot out the top, and it gently lowered to the ground. It was over, and the Brain was gone forever. Except…. Mindworm's rocket had dealt no damage to that tube…. What if not even lava could melt its way thorugh….?
Don't miss THE OVERSEERS, the story of eight daring heroes against the man who holds the world in his hands! Coming Soon....
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Post by Frostbite200 on Jul 24, 2010 23:18:01 GMT -6
I read the 7th ep yesterday....Awesome!, things are getting REALLY GOOD!
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Post by Frostbite200 on Jul 26, 2010 17:42:54 GMT -6
Ep 8.....READ IT PEOPLE...OR YOU'LL regret it!
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Post by Kranstin Kardashian on Jul 26, 2010 20:35:15 GMT -6
Ep 8.....READ IT PEOPLE...OR YOU'LL regret it! But I regret so many things already.
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Post by Frostbite200 on Jul 26, 2010 21:19:58 GMT -6
Ep 8.....READ IT PEOPLE...OR YOU'LL regret it! But I regret so many things already. Oh, dare I ask?
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Post by cradleman on Jul 26, 2010 23:50:39 GMT -6
DAMN that was brilliant. and the end. Oh My GOD! it's so tragic and heartrending, but completely awesome. Loving every sentence, great stuff. Cannot wait for the last 2 episodes!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by cradleman on Jul 26, 2010 23:51:27 GMT -6
btw, my guess for villain is Fangye. just putting it out there in case i'm right(which i'm never right about anything, so don't worry about it, lol)
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Post by Frostbite200 on Jul 29, 2010 17:20:49 GMT -6
HOLY MOTHER OF ABRAHAM LINCOLN!!!!! That was awesome! And if I don't get the next one in 6 seconds I'm going to di.......
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Post by jukenami on Jul 29, 2010 17:28:31 GMT -6
I really do love it. This season is really different, its all taking place in one day, in one place, with the same people. And yet you keep it interesting. Its a horror mystery now, but I know the series will shift and change, it has changed every season. And I like that, it has the ability to be different. Gooooooooood job
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Post by spideyfan914 on Jul 29, 2010 17:34:04 GMT -6
Thanks, guys! Next episode on Sunday - everything will be revealed. And by that I mean, if you have any questions after next ep, you can finally ask (I made a point not to spoon-feed, so you might actually have questions). So now's your last chance - place your bets on the big revelation, or forever hold your piece!
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Post by Frostbite200 on Jul 29, 2010 19:19:53 GMT -6
I'm with Cradleman, Fangye. Either that, or Shawn.
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Post by Nickpick on Jul 29, 2010 21:58:45 GMT -6
Okay i'll have to admit it. usually i read these stories in my head but no one was around so i thought i have fun with it and read aloud as if i was all the characters. I gave them voices and acted the scenes ( I'm weird remember?) anyway before i knew it, i was really into the episode. It was amazing, i think this season kicks other seasons ass and brags about it. I can't wait for the finale because who knows what you have in store for us... keep it up!!!
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Post by cradleman on Jul 30, 2010 11:41:34 GMT -6
holy mother. . . ! this was amazing. you can feel the tension, and it's so creepy and scary. And because you have shown a willingness to kill off characters(especially when those character's creators are no longer around), i have absolutely no idea if Shawn's gonna survive or not. my guess is that you will kill him, but we will see soon. Sunday can't come soon enough!
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Post by Frostbite200 on Aug 3, 2010 17:36:29 GMT -6
Jus finished the last episode. WOW, just. Yeah. I didn't see the villain coming and yet it seems like it couldn't have been anyone else!
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Post by Nickpick on Aug 3, 2010 22:30:53 GMT -6
Really amazing episode! it's a story that has you thinking long after you read it and if it has me doing that then it must be a good story.
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